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I've had my crippling moments.
They'd either start in my stomach
with an ache like broken glass
or stab me right in the catharsis,
somewhere near my heart or breath
or maybe my left foot.

I wouldn't know how it feels
to hurt to walk, but I imagine
with a destination like farther,
it's no pilgrimage.
So take the burden off your back.
Life is not a sandstorm
and your lungs are only a mirage
if you expect to see your breath
every time you breathe.
So take a breath

back, just one step

and listen with your smoke signals.
Help is on the way.
I just can't promise
it knows much about this lifetime.
It's the same way I could never promise
elephants remember everything
or that every Elvis impersonator
means thank you very much outside
of his facade. Don't bother asking God either.
He wouldn't know and he wouldn't care.
He's still trying to number the hairs
on my head, hoping he won't lose count.
Our days are often double-digit jerseyed.
And go ahead and tell me now that this isn't a game.
Very few people get a laugh in as their final word.

Some people never stop growing.
It's the reason they live so well
and then it's the reason they die.
Their insides don't have to tiptoe
to cheat the growth spurts marked
by ruler and remembered by the dining room wall.
There are times the brain learns
how to age before the body does.
I remember a girl scout who told her camp counselor
with reptilian eyes and skin enduring like a carapace,

"Don't worry about wrinkles,
you are a tree."

She wasn't afraid of her age.
She wasn't afraid of the way
her body grew more and more
like a stormy night outside
her grandchild's window
every time a decade of candles went out.
She was afraid of getting sick
but even more afraid of forgetting.

So don't worry if you wish
to be buried before your memory.
There is still a tree outside
your granddaughter's bedroom
that casts a shadow like an elephant's skull.
It has a collection of tusks and it knows
each one both in its ebony and its ivory, like piano keys.

We all gather round a sickbed
and with all this weight
I feel part of an elegy for pachyderms.
catharsis.
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Given 2012-11-04
don't get tired of elephants yet by ~Solaces ( Suggested by Vigilo and Featured by BeccaJS )
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CodaBear48 Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012  Student Artist
Ok. This is Pretty Amazing :D
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Solaces Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012
Thanks!
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doublethefun Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012
This is such an amazing piece of work. I admire your skill.
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Solaces Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012
Thank you.:)
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Dontbow Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012  Student General Artist
So sad Yet, Amazing Poetry......
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Solaces Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012
:heart:
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Dontbow Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Student General Artist
An Amazing Poem....
So Sad yet fine as Silk....
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volare-nuovo Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012  Student Writer
Wow, I love this. "Don't worry about wrinkles, you are a tree." fantastic line- so much personality. Wonderful wonderful.
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Solaces Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012
Thank you!
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AFineWar Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Congratulations on your Daily Deviation :clap:
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Solaces Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012
:heart:
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Congratulations on a well deserved DD. Having watched a few of my loved ones part, I can relate to a lot of it. :hug:
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Solaces Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012
:hug:
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Congrats on the DD! :happybounce:
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Solaces Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012
:la:
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ChocoCoatedLemons Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012
This is lovely, pure and painful.
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Solaces Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012
Thanks!
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AzizrianDaoXrak Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Mmmmm, yes. *nods sagely*

Lovely, lovely
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Solaces Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012
:hug:
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Absinth-C-Lover Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012
Stunning poetry ~ Very well written ~ Congrats :shamrock: ^. .^
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Nyiana-sama Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012
:la Congrats on the daily deviation!
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Solaces Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012
Thanks!
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Nyiana-sama Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012
:huggle: You're welcome!
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BeingFiction Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I don't think I could even try to figure this out, but it's beautiful and relatable and profoundly deep all the same.

Thank you.
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Solaces Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012
Thank YOU! :hug:
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BeingFiction Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're so welcome!

It's just so...wonderful!
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GinTsuki Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This made me cry... and it's taking me a long while to figure out the reasons. Thank-you for the feeling.
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Solaces Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012
Aw.:hug:
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pagan-poetess Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Professional Writer
congratulations on the dld for this gorgeous piece :heart:
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rhyme-of-the-rain Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Student General Artist
congratulations on the DLD, it was so very well deserved. :heart:
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Congratulations on your DLD.
A significant effort here. :)
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Lottie-Girl Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Student General Artist
I love how cynical you are :D
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Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DLD (Daily Literature Deviations) in a news article that can be found here [link] Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by :+fav:ing the News Article.

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Hexospectrum Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2012
I find this poem strangely hypnotic... It's wonderful ^^
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Solaces Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2012
Thanks.^^
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
this is way cool :clap:
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Solaces Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2011
Thank you.:)
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
welcome :)
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GLTT16 Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
God, this is beautifully written
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Solaces Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2011
/thank you!
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Adonael Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
The fact that the voice in this poem isn't really aware where they're being stabbed, constantly shifting their thoughts as to where it could've been incited a lot of doubt - about what, I'm not sure?? I'm guessing you're trying to break down life into its basic parts because - well, it is a complex thing to be fair. If that's the case, I admire your bravado :)

"For this reason our days are often double-digit jerseyed.
And go ahead and tell me now that this isn't a game.
Very few people get a laugh in as their final word."

I thought this was very post-modern, in that everything seems pointless if one cannot figure said meaning of life out, but I found myself liking this bit. I thought it would even be string enough to end with but then lo and behold, there was a shift to different place and time and even though it seemed like there should really be two poems, I found the change of scenery and perspective really enegaging, especially when the complexity was filtered through the mind of a young girl who made it all seem so simple.

In short, beautifully written.
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Solaces Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2011
Thank you!
Your comments are always very insightful. Sometimes you bring attention to things I might not have thought of.:)
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Adonael Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Happy to be of help, I guess. No worries :)
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beeinthebottle Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2011   Writer
Beautifully written. And I don't know what you revised, but this piece grabs me even more.
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Solaces Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2011
Thanks!
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Bark Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2011  Professional Writer
:clap:
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SlackInPeace Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2011
Wow. That is some deep stuff you've got there. Nicely done. :)
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Solaces Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2011
Thank you!
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